I don't find it bleak. Just honest. You're observing and telling a story through a poem and I like that, and you have a wonderful imagination. You would be fun to sit in a bar with and people watch together, sharing what we think is going on. I was remarking yesterday to a dear friend that I met on Medium that I'm a poet that doesn't really like reading poetry. I always like reading yours.

PS: I just thought of this poem I wrote two years ago that I think you'll enjoy: https://medium.com/p/b52275fd778f